@toastedbleucheese
You are the very first person I have ever seen—online or in person—who has used more than 10 hand gestures that were all different, all appropriately used, and very helpful in visualizing your points. It is also visually entertaining in keeping people interested in giving you full attention. thank you so much for being the one person I’ve always wanted to be.
@Naknave
Your hand gestures are a godsend for adhd viewers like me, this is the only college essay video my brain could latch to
@melanieavila5759
5 Tips to Remember (Rising Scholar, MA) 1) Essay hooks are imperative because they must obtain the attention of your college admission officers (5-6 minutes on the essay) 2) Begin your essay with a conflict (Make it original, real stakes, evoke sensory details) 3) Indirectly mention what you can bring to college - contribution to campus 4)Connect personal values to strengths that you can 'bring to the table' 5)OR begin your essay with a mystery hook- an unusual event that leaves the reader asking why?
@AshleyChing-c3o
Character vs self - Change to ideology Character vs character - conflict, idea debate Character vs environment - Social, economic, etc
@eternallyidyll
i am aiming to write a whole college essay by this friday, november 15 (early action), and am a major procrastinator. tonight, i finally managed to get myself to click on some college essay videos to start the motor in my brain to get this thing written, and this video is the second one ive watched. THANK YOU so much. i was super unsure of how to start my essay. you reminded me that i dont start with "hi, my name is blank", that i instead need a good hook. then, you gave FANTASTIC hook examples, and multiple types of hooks, which gave me multiple hits of inspiration. the hooks section helped so much. then the conclusion part was also great. the inspiration for me really hit when you started speaking out loud the example conclusion. i got an idea, i quickly wrote it down in my document, intending to come back to the video and keep listening. however, once i started writing the idea, it just kept flowing and now i have an extremely rough version of what my conclusion will probably be. its uh.. its all i have for now... but i am suddenly motivated to write after weeks of being paralyzed, unable to start the essay. THANK YOU SO MUCH FR, your video was so helpful and i would list all the ways it was great, but i have to keep this flow youve granted me!! thank you thank you!!
@andrewj2k_
The advice, especially on conclusions, really helped!
@kiroao
My common app essay about growth and development achieved through a particular experience hasn’t been very productive to say the least. Can’t really tie down any incident from my life where my character really stood out, what to do when you have a very boring life and still wanna get into a good uni -.- Your video was really helpful, hope i’ll come up with something unique!
@forthemhobbies9793
thank you so much for this! your style of delivering message and those little animatic movements you make are so interesting, I keep my focus all the time while watching your video! and those are really great tips, I plan to alter it to my own versions when i write my essay. Please pray for me so I am able to go to my dream country!
@writewellbrooklyn
As a writing coach myself, LOVE the funny + authentic approach here & agree with this great advice! I'll add that since aiming for a great hook/conclusion can crank up the pressure, sometimes even before the students begin, I love to encourage students START by, well, just writing badly—with no hook at all! (I use lots of tricks for this, from "mini-prompts" to a "messy messy first draft..."). Then—and this is key!—through REVISION, students can find the really great hook in their writing that will draw readers in, and create that powerhouse conclusion....✏💪 Thanks for this fantastic vid! Ashleigh (Write Well Brooklyn)
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@systemloading45
You don't understand how helpful you are, your advice is much appreciated!!!
@mxvortex2341
You're truly a masterclass in retaining attention. I don't know how you managed to make such unique hand gestures that still look natural and authentic.
@ngwuemeka1838
This advice on conclusions really helped . Been working on my conclusion for over 4 months now 😢
@bruhnish598
i love how you use hand gestures to keep viewers engaged. this was probably the most useful video I have watched to date. i will for sure be watching more videos from your channel. and btw the conclusion you said was ABSOLUTELY AMAZING
@Sappuloll
5:30 is a perfect example for conclusion !!
@evolutionarydays5237
Thank you so much for the helpful advice! I was a little uncertain about my essay's flaws, but you really helped me strengthen my conclusion and introduction. Thanks!
@kristenyang._.
This video is so well written and organized! Well done and thank you for the practical/constructive advice!
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